After atleast 5 revisions, I made a story called Run For Your Life. This story is about my mom's reactions after almost being stung by a bee. Believe it or not, every single part of this story is 100 percent true. Other than my mom, a bee is my main character. Read how this thrilling experience scares my mom big time!
I liked how you mixed many emotions. Tired, terror, laughter, there were so funny! You also described each one of them so well. Another thing you described well is the setting. I could totally imagine what it looked like. I loved your writing!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Anushka about you mixing a lot of emotions. That is a very hard thing to do and you did a great job at it. I also like how you put a lot of detail in what you were feeling and thinking in that small moment. Great job!
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